PROMPT WORD: STRUCTURE
Jim and Carlos had undertaken the grandest project of their lives with the goal of building the tallest structure EVER!
On the Brightside, they had secured all the materials needed and felt they had ample time to realize their shared dream.
The downside was their archrival Rachael who had quelled many construction projects simply with her imposing presence and zeal for having things her own way.
The two architects had paid special attention to the foundation; reinforcing it against any tremors that might arise on their carefully chosen site which they decided was the least prone to extreme natural forces that had proven catastrophic to their former projects.
When the moment arrived to cap off the tower’s final peak, Jim and Carlos raised their arms in celebration but simultaneously noticed a familiar rhythmic thumping beneath their feet causing their eyes to become saucers.
In the next split second their labor, hopes, and dreams vanished when they screamed, “RACHAEL!” and their 18-month-old baby sister took the whole thing down with one vicious kick.
34 thoughts on “Six Sentence Story- Natural Forces”
Ha, ha. Nice twisted plot. I have memories of these structures and constant disasters, especially looking after the grandkids.
LOL… oh the tales of similar woes were many during my childcare years!
Aww, all that effort gone down.
I assume they’ll have ample time to get even. LOL
Perhaps all through their childhood
Haha…too familiar! I am sure you have a treasure box of stories from your lifetime’s work…best seller material!
🙂 So happy it worked for you!
Sucked me in big time, you clever clogs you. An absolute delight.
Bingo! If I could ‘play’ you, I succeeded! Thanks.
Surprise ending! Love it!
Thanks! It accomplished my goal. 😊
A, the pesky younger sibling. Well i know the story, i had two of them.
They may destroy our dreams from time to time but they certainly are agents of character building. 😊
No! Not the monster baby sister from the great beyond of the nursery! What a great setup, Susan. You’re so good at that.
Baby sisters have been doing that since the beginning of time. They are truly forces of Nature! LOL Thanks Dora.
Didn’t see it coming till the bricks landed on my head!
😊 I don’t expect those guys will give up. A better plan is in order. LOL
Excellent twist, Susan. I suspected nothing.
🥰 Thanks! It’s wonderful when that happens.
ha! While others have mentioned the surprise ending, I found myself caught up in an over-complicated assessment when I started. For whatever reason, I was well down the path of connecting this Six to something mythological, if not biblical.
I repeat: ha! total surprise (and enjoyable) ending to your Six.
Bonus: a reminder for myself, default to the simpler than the more…complicated explanation
I’m delighted by your comment, Clark! Too fool and please you are most humbling accomplishments. Such are the lessons children offered me on a daily basis… simple and profoundly entertaining. Thanks very much!
Well told description of those children, especially Rachel “with her imposing presence and zeal for having things her own way”. One of them should have been blocking her from getting to the building.
A better plan for dealing with Rachael is a must! They’ll need to put their ‘thinking caps’ on. Thanks Frank.
Many thanks! 😊
This reminded me of playing Jenga!
😁 Me too! Thanks Keith.
Talk about execution, Susan! Excellent set up. ceayr’s comment made me smile because I also did not see the twist coming, lol.
I’m blushing. We have such a skilled and clever bunch doing Sixes, I had no idea whether the misdirection would work! Thank-you!
Good one 😁😂 I imagined at the end it might have been sandcastles on a beach, or a tower of Lego falling, or as Keith said, Jenga!
😁 You were perceptive! Thanks.