Friday Fictioneers 10-1-21~ Critical Surroundings

PHOTO PROMPT Β© Dale Rogerson

Upon exiting the pitch-black darkened forest, an odd edifice leapt into our view.
A welcomed reprieve, was the fading daylight, from our haunted disoriented wandering. It felt like the relief from removing of a blindfold.
The vacant manicured grounds shouted, “TRESSPASSERS!”.
Desperate to get back to camp, we left a note, and borrowed a small rowboat docked on the lake beyond.
The boat complained, “THIEVES!”
The lights of the campground grew brighter as we approached the opposite shore.
We looked at each other feeling foolish about forgetting our flashlights.
At last, the full moon rose and uttered, “Follow me, MORONS!”.

(100 words)

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48 thoughts on “Friday Fictioneers 10-1-21~ Critical Surroundings

  1. granonine 09/29/2021 / 1:37 pm

    Inanimate objects directing and accusing humans. That’s an interesting idea.

    • Susan St.Pierre 09/29/2021 / 1:56 pm

      Their own consciences may be part of this too! Thanks Linda.

  2. larry trasciatti 09/29/2021 / 1:39 pm

    During a full moon, even inanimate matter and nature can by nasty

  3. neilmacdon 09/29/2021 / 3:09 pm

    Nobody likes a rude moon! That satellite will have to mend its ways

    • Susan St.Pierre 09/29/2021 / 4:02 pm

      Well, it was feeling “full” of itself because it was “that time of the month”. πŸ˜€

  4. Ain Starlingsson 09/29/2021 / 3:28 pm

    Wonderful style..

  5. Bill 09/29/2021 / 6:13 pm

    Oh lawdy! There is no feeling like being alone in wilderness after dark with no source of light (nor the other nine essentials). And yes, everything talks to you and all the eyes can see you. Fool, indeed. Well done!

      • Bill 09/29/2021 / 6:48 pm

        Long story, but oh yes. I’m sure I’ve written about it. I was alone. What was I thinking?

  6. msjadeli 09/29/2021 / 8:56 pm

    Entertaining story, Susan πŸ™‚

  7. Dora 09/29/2021 / 9:04 pm

    “An odd edifice,” huh? These really are lost souls. No wonder their consciences are screaming overtime! πŸ˜… You really capture the sense of reprieve though, of coming out of oppressive darkness into light. Knowing you’re safe again.

    • Susan St.Pierre 09/29/2021 / 9:28 pm

      Thanks Dora. You’re insightful. πŸ˜‰

      • Dora 09/29/2021 / 9:30 pm

        I try. :>)

  8. Tannille 09/30/2021 / 12:58 am

    β€œFollow me morons” β€” hahaha, yes.

  9. draliman 09/30/2021 / 1:42 am

    A pitch-black forest and no torch – yeeks!

  10. Sandra 09/30/2021 / 3:53 am

    Loved the style of this. Well done.

  11. GHLearner 09/30/2021 / 8:31 am

    That was fun, talking subconscious surroundings, unique.

  12. Dale 09/30/2021 / 10:46 am

    I love this take, Susan! Fun stuff.

    • Susan St.Pierre 09/30/2021 / 11:34 am

      ‘Fun’ is a favorite comment to a sillyfrog! 🀣❀

  13. James McEwan 10/01/2021 / 4:39 am

    sounds like they are not country folk and easily disorientated in life.

    • Susan St.Pierre 10/01/2021 / 7:14 am

      Perhaps, this was a wakeup call? Thanks for commenting. I agree that country folk are more grounded. πŸ˜‰

  14. rochellewisoff 10/01/2021 / 8:25 am

    Dear Susan,

    The title says it all πŸ˜‰ Critical surroundings indeed. Fun stuff.



  15. plaridel 10/01/2021 / 4:09 pm

    it looks they were escapees from the mental insitution. they should enjoy their freedim while it lasted. πŸ™‚

    • Susan St.Pierre 10/01/2021 / 4:10 pm

      LOL… They seem harmless to everyone but themselves. Thanks!

  16. Brenda's Thoughts 10/02/2021 / 6:47 pm

    A very clever and entertaining story. I love the way you wrote it, Susan! I hear inanimate objects shouting at me all of the time for the silly things I do. =)

    • Susan St.Pierre 10/02/2021 / 6:57 pm

      😊 I appreciate your comment Brenda. [I understand what you mean about inanimate objects. Their so critical! 😁]

  17. pennygadd51 10/03/2021 / 7:13 am

    Forgetting their flashlights could have been a critical mistake. Nice oblique take on the prompt.

  18. Na'ama Yehuda 10/05/2021 / 2:26 pm

    Well, seeing that I very often talk TO inanimate objects (and Luna, who may well NOT be inanimate, seeing how she likes to play tug with the tides …), it makes sense to me that they’d, at last, sometimes, reply … πŸ˜‰

    • Susan St.Pierre 10/05/2021 / 4:51 pm

      😊 Thanks! I’ve oft anthropomorphized inanimate objects.

      • Na'ama Yehuda 10/06/2021 / 10:43 am

        πŸ™‚ They ARE listening to everything we say, you know. I’ve long been told of walls with ears … πŸ˜‰

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