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Six Sentence Story- Big Mistake


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The train was coming up on its final sharp corner before pulling into the station.

It followed a familiar route, made thousands of times, through a small, still, village with steeples poking above beautiful, symmetrically groomed, trees, then it passed through a brief black tunnel -disappearing for a moment – before it climbed a sharply steep grade.

Marielle was a first-time engineer, with an agenda, who snickered with delight anticipating the stomach turning curve awaiting the machine on the other side.

The passengers were stoically quiet as they were tossed back and forth, a bit, by the engineer’s heavy-handed acceleration but all seemed familiar and routine.

With the curve coming into view, Marielle throttled up again anticipating the thrill of her life while blowing the whistle signaling the train’s arrival when it DERAILED – ejecting every passenger and creating a wreckage debris field of epoch proportion!

Her brother sobbed at the scene vowing never to let his sister operate his favorite toy again!


I love a well told story. If it makes me laugh, all the better.

30 thoughts on “Six Sentence Story- Big Mistake

      1. I keep thinking of the saying: ‘the light at the end of the tunnel is an oncoming train’. I’ll try and brush that from my mind, while Marielle’s brother picks up the pieces… ๐Ÿš‚๐Ÿšƒ๐Ÿšƒ๐Ÿšƒ

  1. lol
    The mark of a good writer is to be able to get the Reader right to the ‘punchline’ without tipping their hand. Especially with Six Sentence Story which don’t exactly provide excess room to distract the Reader until the right moment.
    very cool Six

  2. Ha, excellent. I did wonder from the picture if the story was going to be about a toy train… and you kept me thinking right to the end. A friend of mine is a model train enthusiast and has a huge spare room devoted to it. The attention to detail in creating his ‘mini train world’ is staggering.

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