Six Sentence Story- Welcome Back

Rules of the hop:
Write 6 Sentences. No more. No less.
Use the current week’s prompt word.
Link up at Wednesday’s post. Link goes live at 6:00 pm through Saturday late…
Spread the word and put in a good one to your fellow writers. PROMPT WORD:  ALTERNATIVE

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As she wove her way through the crowd kneading her pockets searching for her phone, she felt invisible and the odor of gasoline was strong.

There’d been a car accident and police kept pressing the inner wall of spectators farther away because of serious concerns over a possible explosion.

She slipped passed a distracted fireman, approaching the mangled vehicle feeling she had no alternative but to investigate because she was drawn by a level of curiosity she’d never, ever, felt before.

Steam rose from the car radiator and she could hear the radio still playing… it was her favorite station.

As she placed her hands where the rear passenger side window should have been and leaned in, the emergency crew extricated the trapped driver and furiously raced away from the car, then – “BOOM” – the car burst into flames!

All she remembers, to this day, is being inside an ambulance and the EMT, beside her, smiling and reassuringly patting her arm saying, “Welcome back. You’re safe now. We got you out JUST in time!”.

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29 thoughts on “Six Sentence Story- Welcome Back

  1. Mason Bushell 06/30/2021 / 11:27 am

    Wow! That was a little close for comfort. However, I rather feel she was a ghost until waking up in the ambulance. Clever tale!

    • Susan St.Pierre 06/30/2021 / 11:30 am

      Out of body experience, for sure Mason. Thanks for commenting!

      • Mason Bushell 06/30/2021 / 12:16 pm

        Ah it was! Awesome, Well done!

  2. Shweta Suresh 06/30/2021 / 11:51 am

    Wow. She must have been very lucky indeed. Sounds like an out of body experience indeed

  3. GirlieOnTheEdge 06/30/2021 / 7:17 pm

    Great Six, Susan! I like all of the subtle references and hints and yet, it was a surprise ending 😀

    • Susan St.Pierre 06/30/2021 / 7:44 pm

      Thank-you. I had two other alternative endings and wasn’t sure which one to use. How’s that for getting ‘all in’ on a prompt? 🤣

  4. Doug Jacquier 06/30/2021 / 8:03 pm

    Clever. Flitting in and out of your own disaster. She’ll be attending her own funeral next. 😉

  5. UP 07/01/2021 / 8:53 am

    more than a near miss. but you didn’t miss anything on this six. Great job.

  6. Chris Hall 07/01/2021 / 9:46 am

    Really clever stuff, Susan. That worked a treat!

      • Chris Hall 07/01/2021 / 11:39 am

        We could vote on them! 🙂

      • Susan St.Pierre 07/01/2021 / 11:48 am

        The others may have needed a few more sentences but THAT’S a great idea for the future!
        I often find a couple ways my flash fiction might go. Next time that happens, I’ll post those endings with the story for everyone’s critique. Thanks, Chris.

  7. Keith's Ramblings 07/01/2021 / 12:28 pm

    Seems she owes her life to the EMT that revived her. A terrific tale Susan.

    • Susan St.Pierre 07/01/2021 / 9:46 pm

      Thank you. Yes… it worked out in perfect timing. 😊

  8. Frank Hubeny 07/01/2021 / 10:23 pm

    It seems that she ultimately survived that crash and wasn’t sure what happened. I’m glad they got her out.

  9. ceayr 07/03/2021 / 9:17 am

    Nicely done, Susan, a cleverly crafted piece

  10. Liz H 07/03/2021 / 11:35 am

    VERY cool. Nicely paced: That subtle shift in perspective, warmed into with the missing phone, the growing familiarity, and then confirmation with the lack of memory of the event. Masterful Six!

  11. jenne49 07/03/2021 / 1:37 pm

    A great plot, slowly uncovered and so well executed, Susan. Love it.

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