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PROMPT WORD: HOME
It had been an agonizing two weeks and almost four hundred miles with Ernesto praying every night for their nightmare to end; sometimes even if it had to be with a merciful death.
He was haunted by too many things to count but having Butch’s imagined lifeless face nightly pursuing him in his dreams was the worst, even overshadowing their discovery, just yesterday, of the stiffened, rat ravaged, corpse of a newborn baby in a village dumpster.
As he and Abria inched toward America, some small kindnesses were afforded them by other ‘travelers’ even though the children weren’t part of any group, so recognizing the woman who had once dressed his knife wound waving to him from atop of an overloaded cattle truck, offered him an unexpected flicker of comfort.
She signaled him to hurry but Abria had already stopped moving her feet during the last hour so he dragged his sister even faster hoping to catch that blessed ride, when suddenly he let her go, because Abria, who hadn’t spoken a word since her attack ,screeched, “STOP! I want to go HOME!”.
Dust coagulated her tears and thickened the nasal discharge she’d had for days as she collapsed like an ancient woman on her deathbed; that scene of her crumbling before his eyes manufactured anger and anguish in Ernesto to the point of threatening to rupture his heart.
As the truck pulled away without them, Ernesto swept his frail, nearly weightless, sister up in the last daylight while cursing their father to HELL through clenched teeth, then rushed to find a hiding spot far away from the impending next wave of the caravan, which held far more danger than anything unseen they’d encounter in the brush after dark.
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I like how you built up the tension especially with the panic Abria experienced.
Thanks so much Frank. 😊
Oh, wow! Reading this after watching a movie last night about a family trying to escape from war torn Laos added even more horrid images of man’s inhumanity to man. I realize you SSS has nothing to do with the movie I watched, but there were some similarities. This is so well written!
That’s very kind of you. I’m so pleased it succeeded in what I was trying to convey. Many thanks for your comment, Pat.
So many difficult truths in these six sentence stories of Ernesto and his sister. And does it end at a wall?
Thank you for continuing their story.
Thank you for reading and commenting. We shall see about the wall. 😉
Your continuation of this story still holds the intensity present in the first installment. A testament to your writing, Susan.
Much appreciated! I’ve come to care so much about these kids.
Gripping stuff, Susan. Well done.
Thank you for reading and commenting, Doug. I’m pleased.
So much pain and fear and terror in this world, and way too much of it is experienced by children.
You’re correct. Hard to stomach. 😥
Rivetting story!
Appreciate your interest and comment. Thanks.
Great continuation, Susan. I’m really invested in your characters.
Thank you again. I have some twists planned… stay tuned.
Excellent!
excellent. gripping story
Thanks!
Damn!*
Good Six, yo
* a compliment on a Six (serialized) that is relentlessly engaging yet has such emotional content as to leave the Reader feel like a rider approaching the next to last steep incline
WOW! A most humbling comment. Thanks so much. Stay tuned… a few twists on the horizon. 😉
Jings, Susan, this is harrowing stuff.
Expert portrayal of desperation and misery.
You brought the reader into the scene.
Thank you and sorry about that too. It’s a real life nightmare!
I am so sorry. Hugs
Dear me! I feel there is so much more to come … ?
Yes, Part 3 this week. Twists on the horizon.
The missing link, thanks, Susan. The pacing’s good and you’re hitting all the sweet spots narrative-wise. Like I said, I’m hooked 🙂
😊❤