Six Sentence Story – Dancing with Death

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Bumblebee succumbs to a goldenrod spider. photo by sillyfrog

THIS IS A WEEKLY CHALLENGE TO WRITE A SIX SENTENCE STORY.
This week’s prompt is to use the word “theory”.

Dancing with Death

It was a life and death drama as dynamic as those of gladiators at the Colosseum in Rome, minus the 50,000 spectators, playing out on a single flower among the late summer weeds.

A goldenrod spider, armed with numbing venom, had ambushed the bumblebee who, in theory, had an equally well-equipped arsenal and likely could have been victorious but for the elements of camouflage and surprise the arachnid utilized with strategic excellence.

It was over in seconds as the venom pulsed into the insect, completely paralyzing the bee removing all possible threats of counter actions, thus sparing the spider any injury before she would dine on the spoils.

In the next few days, another battle most definitely will ensue between predator and prey and this spider, unassured of victory each and every time, will dance with death again in her own pantry for the privilege of sustenance.

She one day soon may meet her match and perish but not without the glory of claiming her place as a formidable warrior in the ongoing struggle of life.

Knowing all this makes human beings impatiently beeping their horns in a long line, at the Burger King drive-thru, look rather lame, don’t you think?
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28 thoughts on “Six Sentence Story – Dancing with Death

  1. Doug Jacquier 03/03/2021 / 6:20 pm

    Excellent piece, Susan. ‘will dance with death again in her own pantry for the privilege of sustenance’ is a gem.

  2. Romi 03/03/2021 / 6:25 pm

    Your story gives a new insight.

  3. Frank Hubeny 03/03/2021 / 6:28 pm

    Nice phrase: “dance with death again in her own pantry for the privilege of sustenance”

    • Susan St.Pierre 03/03/2021 / 6:49 pm

      Thanks so much! I thought that one was ‘sweet’ too.

  4. GirlieOnTheEdge 03/03/2021 / 6:56 pm

    Yes, I do think!
    Captivating Six from the first sentence, Susan. Certain poetry in your telling of one of nature’s dances. Formatting was a perfect fit 🙂

  5. Chris Hall 03/04/2021 / 4:55 am

    I love the build up in this, Susan… and then that last sentence made me smile. Oh yes, the arrogant futility of those hooting humans! 🙂

  6. UP 03/04/2021 / 8:17 am

    very insightful good job

    • Susan St.Pierre 03/04/2021 / 8:38 am

      Much appreciated. I marvel at the unseen everyday dramas in Nature. 🙂

  7. D. Avery @shiftnshake 03/04/2021 / 3:12 pm

    Ha! Going all Annie Dillard on us then that last line. Chain fast food restaurants seem so removed from the food chain struggle you so eloquently describe.

    • Susan St.Pierre 03/04/2021 / 3:56 pm

      I try to add a poignant zinger when I can. Thanks very much. 🙂

  8. clark 03/04/2021 / 4:10 pm

    “It was a life and death drama… playing out on a single flower among the late summer weeds
    They say, first line is the most important… you have not only engaged the Reader, but treated us to a visual opening that hurries to keep up with the cascade of action that follows.
    Good Six

    • Susan St.Pierre 03/04/2021 / 4:14 pm

      Appreciate your inciteful comment. Makes me think, in retrospect, that’s all the first sentence should have said. Less is almost always more. Thanks you, Clark!

  9. Joyce P Lansky 03/04/2021 / 6:00 pm

    Your ending really caught me off guard. LOL! Interesting six.

    • Susan St.Pierre 03/04/2021 / 7:13 pm

      Thanks, Joyce. I hoped it would jump out at you… like a spider. 😉

  10. Liz H 03/04/2021 / 8:47 pm

    Best Kwitcherbitchin’ story ever told.
    Nice build up to the lesson to be learned!

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